I-Banking Resume #4: Corp Dev or Finance?
By BankersBall on Apr 22, 2008 in Interviewing, Investment Banking Resumes
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Objective: “Next position I want to get into is within investment banking after Cisco and essentially revert back to finance if I dont get into corporate development within this company.”
On Apr 22, 2008, Big Baller said:
Starbucks is hiring… but drop that pile of crap that you put under summary of qualifications because even Starbucks wouldn’t grant you an interview as is.
On Apr 22, 2008, Anonymous said:
summary of qualifications = no-no
On Apr 22, 2008, Jo mama said:
I agree with others.
- SOQ is wasting good white space. You definitely wouldn’t need it if you were also including a cover letter.
- Coursework stuff isn’t that important… it comes off as fluff. if anything, i would insert an additional skills section in which you explicitly state you have working knowledge of accounting or whatever you’re trying to convey through coursework.
- You end some bullet points with periods while other bullet points don’t have periods FYI.
- The problem I have with the tone of the work experience is that you use a lot of “buzzwords” and over-generalized ambiguous finance terms that make my eyes glaze over.
- I like the general formatting. It looks pretty.
On Apr 22, 2008, Anonymous said:
Everyone is so eager to say they have quant skills nowadays. From your willingness to list your skills, I would imagine if you knew C++, matlab, R, etc.. you would have listed them. Which really leads me to believe your “quant” skills aren’t really quant skills.
But this all comes back to what the other posters have said, take that entire thing off.
On Apr 22, 2008, Sr. Excel Monkey said:
definitely not the worst i’ve seen on this website, though your experience for IB is a little weak. Agree that SOQ is crap.
On Apr 22, 2008, Monkey Business said:
I agree, a rogue period in the “associate” skills section is a non-starter for any i-bank. If you really want to format documents for a living, you better convey that skill-set!
An another note, didn’t go to Stanford so stop trying to act like you did. Put that and the qualifications bs in an “additional” section on the bottom.
On Apr 22, 2008, Monkey said:
Don’t listen to the haters. Although your summary of qualifications section makes you look like a moron, and this impression is compounded by the fact that you went to a state university (and Washington at that, I thought Washington was a city). Did they teach you forrestry there? Maybe this is a good resume for Pacific Crest Securities. O wait shit I wrote that first sentence before actually reading your resume…just give it up! you missed the boat buddy its a tough uphill climb from where your are. I’d imagine you are looking for an entry level job, but you gotta be what 28?!! No 28 year old ANALysts
On Apr 22, 2008, Monkey said:
Actually, did notice you worked for Cisco, maybe thats a good start for a VP? (though probably not an ANALyst or ASSociate)
On Apr 22, 2008, Anonymous said:
What font is that?
On Apr 22, 2008, Wade Brooke said:
Just another historical tombstone. Would you take a second date if all she did on the date was talk about her previous boy friends? What are your goals? Transferable experiences & skills, and most important what is your value proposition? Putting education first simply states that you have no experience, achievements or accomplishments. The resume is a marketing piece, its a bill board merely to get an interview. You must get someone attention and pique their interest … just what can you do for them.
On Apr 23, 2008, Anonymous said:
this resume is written pretty poorly. agree with all the comments above.
also you dont use an abbreviation without saying what it is in parenthesis.
This Resume is Garbage (TRIG)
On Apr 24, 2008, ballsonchin said:
You’re summary statement is obnoxious and borderline non-sensical. Your experience is all over the map. What’s with the stupid grid thing at the top? I don’t even understand the program your currently enrolled in. WTF is that?
On Apr 26, 2008, AJG said:
- Remove summary statement
- Remove skill grid
- Noticed your Stanford stint didnt start yet, so remove that too
- Don not abreviate… WIKI, MSF, 68M, etc.
- Bullet points too long
- Endowment bullet points look a little better than the rest
- Convey banking attributes
content like “utilized internal tools to initiate startup projects” is uninspiring. Of course you use internal tools.
On Apr 28, 2008, Anonymous said:
Clearly the candidate possesses “proven writing ability”… job well done.
On Aug 7, 2008, Writer said:
I have to say that your writing skills are pretty bad. You have many grammatical errors, many sentences incomplete, and sometimes I don’t know if YOU did that, or the COMPANY you worked for did that. I would re-write them, specifying all the things YOU have CONTRIBUTED. Summary of Qualifications is far-off. Skills on the bottom, ok, but in full sentences. I would also post the Work Experience First, since you have more to offer there than with your Academic Background.
Hope this helps.